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My favorite scene is when the house flies. The scene moves us deeply. First, this movie is a Pixar animation film. I saw this movie with my friends at the library quite recently, so I remember I was impressed very much. To tell the truth, my friends Bora was moved to tears.

 

To return to my main topic, I like the scene when the house flies. The main character, Carl Fredricksen, he was met a girl named Ellie when he was a boy. They were married later years. They were living happily but Ellie died because of old age. Carl was grieved very much. I think that we can be deeply impressed with this scene too. We must be moved to tears. In fact I was close to tears when I saw the scene.

 

To return to the story, he was promised Ellie to go to the legendary waterfall “Paradise falls” together with her, so he makes his house fly to fulfill the promise. This scene is the most impressive scene in the movie, I think. In fact Bora also was moved to tears by seeing the scene. He is famous for easily moved to tears among us. I think that this scene is very important. Everybody must have a memory or image of the scene remaining in their mind if watch the movie. As I see it, this movie wants to tell importance of the love of a husband and wife. Of course, it is a love of Carl and Ellie. In addition, we can feel importance of their lives too. If there are people who have never watched this movie, I want them to watch it and take away a new appreciation of life from this movie. I am grateful to meet a fantastic movie like this. I don’t think you can form an idea of how amusing this is, unless you see for yourself. Don’t miss it!

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Essay 2-03b: Google presentations

Essay 2-01b: My Greatest Support

My favorite place is my house because my house always makes me comfortable. So I like my house very much. Many points I like exists. I want to introduce it to reader. My house is located in the town of Mifune. To tell the truth, I live in Kumamoto city now. But I want to introduce my house in Mifune this time.

First I'm feel relieved when I'm in my house, because Mifune is a rural town. Many verdure exist in a rural town. I think that nature makes us comfortable. I feel good when I'm in spot surrounded by nature. This is the first reason of it.

Next I can do many things in my house. For example, watch TV, listen to music, and study. I especially like to watch TV and DVDs. I often watch TV programs and DVDs I borrowed. It is very fun to me. When I watch it, my house provides me with comfortable space, so I can watch it in relax. I like to listen to music too. I always listen to Western music in particular. I have a good time when I listen to it. It is a time of supreme bliss. I can do these things in my house freely, so I like my house. 

Of course I study many things because I'm a University student. I think that everyone always go to the library to study, and do not study when they are in their house. But I don't like study in the library. I don't know why, but I don't become composed when I'm in the library. I dislike too quiet atmosphere, so I always study at home. The place that I study is my house too.

I like to sleep. I'm glad to go to bed. Everybody sleep in them house, so houses undertake important role. I think I can not sleep anywhere else. I can sleep in only my house, so I want to go home and go to sleep now.

As you can see, I like my house a lot for many reasons. I go to my house when I feel sick. My house helps me everytime. I always appreciate my house because of it. I will rely on it from now.

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Essay 1-01b: Revision of Letter to a Homestay Family

Hello. My name is Tomohiro. I’m a student of KGU. I really like English very much. I want to talk about my hobby from now. 

I have some hobbies. I listen to music for example, I like Western music in particular, also I especially like R&B and HIP HOP in Western music, because their music makes me relax and excite. When I’m tired, they makes me feel better. My favorite artists recently are TOMI, MISHON, Diggy Simmons and so on.

The other hobby I have is to play sports. I belonged to the tennis club before, but I prefer football more than tennis. I like to play football very much. I also like to watch football games. My favorite football team is Real Madrid, because I like Cristiano Ronaldo. He is so cool. I think that everyone likes him. I want to be good at football like him though I think It is impossible.

 My other hobby is to go for a drive, because driving is fun. But unfortunately I’m not good at parking. So I want to be good at parking like everyone. My last hobby is to watch TV programs. I like comedy programs in particular. My favorite TV programs are “Arabikidan” “on-air battle” and so on, and also my favorite comedian is Hitoshi Matsumoto. He is very interesting. I think everyone knows him, because he often appears on television. All his programs are fun. I think that he is genius.

 I also like to watch the movies. My favorite movie is Transporter series. I especially like Transporter 3, because I like Jason Statham who plays hero of this movie. He is so cool even though he has thin hair. I also like Robert Downey Jr. He is an actor. He is cool also. He plays iron man.

 These are things about me. I’m pleased to meet you. Finally, I ask you a few questions. What are your hobbies? Do you like music? What sports do you like? Do you like to go on a drive? Who is your favorite movie star? What is your favorite TV programs?

 I’m glad if you could answer.

[363 words]

Essay 1-03b: Revised movie reviews

This movie is a story about a family. I watched the first part of this movie, and I thought that viewers of this movie can feel many feelings of characters from this movie. For example, love, disapointment, loneliness, sadness and so on. I felt the love of the family from this movie in particular. I thought that this movie trying to convey us such things also. Such feelings are described in this movie clearly.

Many characters appear on this movie. Daniel, a fond father. Miranda, Daniel's wife and a designer. These two are main characters of this story, and they have three children. Lidia, Chris and Natalie are they. Daniel is loved by the children very much. Two main themes of this movie that I consider are love of the family and husband's disappointment. I think that these are important point of this movie.

Daniel has a job, but he has a tendency to loaf on the job. Moreover he plays with his children though he has such habit. On the other hand, Miranda is pressed by her job and housework. She stressed it, and she dislikes the his habit. One day, he hold a Chris's birthday party, and he made a fuss in the party. When Miranda knew that, she got angry with the incident, and she finally washed her hands of him. So they divorced. I think that it is naturally thing.

 The occurrence disappointed him. After they divorced, he was driven out of his home. Moreover Miranda got a custody of the children, because he is unable to earn his own living.  I think that he was stupid. I want him to know his stupidity. I could feel the husband's disappointment from this thing. I think that it was very great sorrow.

I think that the children was disappointed about the incident too. I consider that it is a great sorrow, because the children love their father very much. So I think that she may have regreted the dicision of divorce, and Daniel was sorry about what he did. I could feel love of the family from this thing. I thought that this movie wants to convey such feelings to the viewers also.

This movie describes many feelings of characters. We can feel the feelings from this movie. So I think that this movie is really good movie. In addition, we can learn about importance of a family. I think that we should cherish the family. I want to recommend everyone this movie, and I want everyone to appreciate good of this movie.

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Essay 1-01a: Letter to a Homestay Family

Hello. My name is Tomohiro. I’m a student of KGU. I like English very much.

I also have some hobbies. I listen to music for example, I like Western music in particular, also I especially like R&B and HIP HOP in Western music, because their music makes me relax. When I’m tired, they makes me feel better. My favorite artists recently are TOMI, MISHON, Diggy Simmons.

 The other hobby I have is to play sports. I belonged to the tennis club before, but I prefer football more than tennis. I like to play football. I also like to watch football games. My favorite football team is Real Madrid. I like Cristiano Ronaldo. He is so cool. I think everyone likes him. I want to be good at football like him.

 My other hobby is to go for a drive, because driving is fun. But unfortunately I’m not good at parking. So I want to be good at parking like everyone. My last hobby is to watch TV programs. I like comedy programs in particular. My favorite TV programs are “Arabikidan” “on-air battle” and so on, and also my favorite comedian is Hitoshi Matsumoto. He is very interesting. I think everyone knows him, because he often appears on television. All his programs are fun.

 I also like to watch the movies. My favorite movie is Transporter series. I especially like Transporter 3, because I like Jason Statham. He is so cool even though he has thin hair. I also like Robert Downey Jr. He is cool also. He plays iron man.

 These are things about me. I’m pleased to meet you. Finally, I ask you a few questions. What are your hobbies? Do you like music? What sports do you like? Do you like to go on a drive? Who is your favorite movie star? What is your favorite TV programs?

 I’m glad if you could answer.

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